SirBladewind's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[Game Grumps- They're Dead]

I remember when game grumps was funny...

It started right after Jon left. =)

Wakman111 responds:

lol i like both eras, it was and still is hilarious; but it's like comparing apples to an orange.

[The Girl on TV]

No no no. You don't sacrifice a SHEEP to raise Glycon the All Powerful. You have to kill a rooster!

Jeez bitches don't get anything right. :p

Sexual-Lobster responds:

sheep rhymes with sleep though. i would have prefered it to be a goat.

[Gamer - Shaping Staff]

Great video! I know you did the pacing for the song, but it was kind of funny/odd how he just stood there and watched as the crazy tentacle lady shot her tentacles out to devour him. Didn't even try to run or shoot her or anything lol.

Also, anyone else notice the computer in her apartment playing space invaders?

spacefader responds:

He couldn't resist the sensual touch she was laying on him.

[Eggban]

Your video and animation skills ain't bad, but god damn does your audio need work. You read your lines off stilted and a little breathy. There isn't really any emotion in what you are saying and you seem kinda bored as you are doing it. When eggman yells it makes it a little incoherent and scratchy and it hurt to hear it a little.

I know its just a silly video that isn't that long, but I'm always hurt by the potential of a video or artist when they just have one thing that ruins it for them. The original concept ain't too bad so you could have had a solid video, and you obviously have good animation skills, so it sucks when it could be so much better. You need to get more into your lines. Part of what makes some of the NG greats so funny is that they can do amazing things with just their voice (go take a look at "Dot Dot Dot" for a good example of this). Now I don't expect you to be able to emulate that kind of practice and control right away, I think however you can probably put in a little more emotion into your lines. I mean "heheh" when can enters was weak. You could have tried that one a few more times till you got it right. And when he says "or I'll fucking kill you" you could have growled it a bit or sounded angry. Instead it came off as...abstracted. Bored. Like its every day someone just walks in and is like "hey wheres the milk, oh by the way I'll fucking kill you".

Put some emotion into it and don't settle on just one or two takes for your lines. You don't have to be perfect but STRIVE for perfection and then even if you don't succeed you'll have a damn good product.

How to get better at voice acting.
1. Get another person to help. Have that person act out the character and you respond. If they character is supposed to be scared, have your counterpart yell the lines at you so you can be genuinely scared (or at least tense) or have them try to act scared to what you were saying so if it sounds weak to them it'll sound weak to you too.
2. Listen to it over and over. Not right away because your brain will filter out the bad, but shelf it for five minutes and get a drink or something then come back and see what it sounds like to you then.
3. Have a test audience and don't be afraid to scrap some stuff if they don't like it. Have a few friends give you honest reviews on your work and don't be discouraged by what they say. Just take it in stride that you are gonna have to change things sometimes to make it better and in the end it'll make you a better artist as a whole.

You got some talent man. I'd like you to do more with it though. Give it your all! I'll be watching you. I hope you feel encouraged by this review of your work and dive back in and kick ass. I'm gonna favorite you and see what else you have in store for me in the future. Good luck!

VioletVulpine responds:

Thanks for the advice. I'm not trying to be high art in voice acting but I'll take a look into what you said.

[An Old Classic]

I gotta say, you don't seem like you really put ANY effort into your voice acting. You animation style is enough that with good story and acting you could make a funny flash, but your voice acting is literally so horrible I wanted to shut it off the moment you started speaking. You need to practice a lot more and next time actually try several takes instead of giving this boring by the numbers performance with no soul and just accepting it right off the bat in your flash. I mean get into your scenes, make yourself the character and then start talking. If the super hero is getting angry he needs to SOUND angry. If the other actor is dying he needs to SOUND convincing. Good sounds make or break a video and in this case it broke it entirely. Try again man. Sorry.

CartoonRecoil responds:

Thank you for the feed back ill work on it.

[Man Spaghetti]

what is this, i don't even...

SpamClamberton responds:

No, you don't.

[Menu]

This just confused me.

DieterTheuns responds:

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[World of a Civilised Duck]

I guess the world isn't different even if you were to switch roles...

Gerkinman responds:

Yeah I dont think anything would change.

[Say Sneeze]

It was okay. The jokes in it made me chuckle a little and the animation was serviceable enough to get the message across but not fluid or beautiful. The concept itself was a thing that was a little funny but to be honest I kind of expected it to be "meh" and "meh" it was. There wasn't much unexpected laugh out loud humor or any surprises and the pacing of the jokes was very slow. When you showed the car I immediately knew they were going to go off a cliff and it took what felt like a long time for the joke to finish. That kind of pacing takes the humor out and makes the animation a little bland. I know you had only 25 days to make it so that can be part of the problem but the overall product that came out was only okay, especially when compared to other artists and animations out there. I absolutely think you can do much better and I'll see what else you have to offer next when you don't have a 25 day deadline hanging over you. Please don't take my review as a personal slight, but rather I hope it motivates you to strive to the give the best product possible because when you release a product that just isn't your best you aren't just doing your audience a disservice, you are also doing a disservice to yourself.

Best of luck to you and I'll watch your animations in the future to see how you grow. =)

Brewster responds:

Thanks for the in depth review. The pacing of the jokes was something I wasn't really sure about. Once I added the song in there, everything changed. The shot where they're driving was a lot shorter and the shot with the dentist was a lot longer, but I switched up the lengths of both so it syncs up with the song. I guess the driving gag was pretty predictable and drawn out but I feel like it balances with the dentist scene's brevity. In any case, I'll keep working on improving. Thanks again!

[Cartoon Genders]

The audio quality ruined it for my i'm sorry. It was difficult to understand and your accent made it worse. A test that helped my friend in animation was he would play his videos and only accept the audio quality if he could understand each word perfectly in the next room. Perhaps you should do that to test next time?

Best of luck.

Pennaz responds:

That's actually a pretty clever idea! Thank you for your help, I'll try it next time I'll need dubs!